Assignment #11(B)

Giving Miss Sasaki a local anaesthetic of procaine, Dr.Sasaki made an incision in her leg on October 23rd, to drain the infection, which still lingered on eleven weeks after the injury. In the following days, so much pus formed that he had to dress the opening each morning and evening. Aweek later, she complained of great pain, so he made another incision; he cut still a third, on Novenber 9th, and enlarged it on the twenty-sixth. All this time, Miss Sasaki grew weaker and weaker, and her spirit fell low. One day, the young man who had lent her his translation of de Maupassant at Hatsukaichi came to visit her; he told her that he was going to Kyushu but that when he came back, he would like to see her again. She didnt care. Her leg had been so swollen and painful all along that the doctor had not even tried to set the fractures, and though an X-ray taken in November showed that the bones were mending, she could see under the sheet that her lelf leg was nearly three inches shorter than her right ant that her lelf foot was turning inward. She thought often the man to whom she hd been engaged. Someone told her he was back from oversea. She wondered what he had heard about her injuries that made him stay away.(p79)
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Assignment #11(A)

Nakamura-san was paid, as a beginner, a hundred and seventy yen- then less than fifty cents-a day. At first, the work was confusing, terribly tiring, and a bit sickening. Her boss worried about her paleness. She had to take many days off. But little by little she became use to the factory. She make friends. There was a family asmosphere. She got raises. In the two ten minute breaks, morning and afternoon, when the moving belt stopped, there was a birdsong of gossip and laughter, in which she joined. It appeared that all along there had been, deep in her temperament, a core of cheerfullness, which must have fuelled her long fight against A-bomb lassitude, something warmer and more vivifying than mere submission, than saying,"Shikataga-nai." The other women took to her; she was constantly doing them small favors. Thet began calling her, affectionately, Oba-san-roughly,"Auntie." (p96)
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